I think I've learned a lot about storytelling from haikus. They are essentially very tiny stories into themselves.
I think that a good story should be a series of moments. A moment being defined as a coupling of action/perception that then produces an emotional response.
We experience the world through our five senses. We see, hear, taste, touch, smell. Followed by these experiences, is usually a feeling. We feel happy, sad, angry, disgusted, scared, surprised, and the infinite variations therein.
A good haiku captures a single moment. In three lines, it sets up a scene, sometimes a very elaborate one, and triggers a feeling in the reader. The brevity of it makes its all the more powerful. Each important moment of a film should have the same punch.
Of course, a film can't be just a series of moments. That's real life. The moments of a good story should all be connected in a meaningful way that creates one big emotional response at the end.
Anyways, so I wanted to share some of my favorite English haikus with you, so you know what the heck I'm talking about.
These are excerpts from The Haiku Anthology. It's a FANTASTIC book. These are only a very very small sampling of the amazing haikus that are in this book.
(When you read them, try to be aware of the feeling that the poem brings up ... )
I stop to listen;
the cricket
has done the same
---Arizona Zipper
first snow ...
the children's hangers
clatter in the closet
---Michael Dylan Welch
my dead bother ....
hearing his laugh
in my laughter
---Nicholas Virgilio
At dawn remembering her bad grammar
---George Swede
the men on both sides
have taken
my armrests
---George Skane
Trying to forget him
stabbing
the potatoes.
---Alexis Rotella
by the autumn hill
my watercolor box
unopened
---Raymond Roseliep
buzzZ
slaP
buzzZ
---Alan Pizzarelli
neighbor's children leave...
casually the cat slips out
of the hall closet
---Patricia Neubauer
end of the cold spell
i'd forgotten the color
of my under socks
---Marlene Mountain
hearing us argue,
our old dog tiptoes past
her empty water bowl
---Carol Montgomery
Letting my tongue
deeper into the cool
ripe tomato
---Michael Mcclintock
the old album:
not recognizing at first
my own young face
---Elizabeth Searle Lamb
While the guests order,
the table cloth hides his hands--
counting his money
---Clement Hoyt
commercial break--
the cat and I
head for the kitchen
---William J. Higginson
I hear her sew
I hear the rain
I turn back a page
----Leroy Gorman
Weight lifter
slowly lifting
the tea cup
----Garry Gay
how come
whatshisname
never speaks to me
----Dee Evetts <--- he's amazing ... its hard to choose just one...
Shielding his eyes
with his baseball glove...
first geese
--Bernard Lionel Einbond
between the twirlers
and the marching band
the missing child
----Bruce Detrick
Waiting to see
the odometer's big change ...
missed it!
---Tom Clausen
long meeting
I study the pattern
embossed on the napkin
----Miriam Borne
the telephone
rings only once
autumn rain
----Nick Avis
cool eh?
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